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People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

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Nowadays,
people
's knowledge about
nature
 is limited, so its
importance
 is usually ignored.
This
 essay will outline the reasons for
this
 ignorance and highlight how including
this
 in schools' curricula could help
people
 learn more about the natural world.
Firstly
, most
people
 are too focused on their daily lives that they forget that other various creatures are out there living as well.
In other words
, work obligations and family responsibilities take the majority of humans' time and interests, making them careless about the pivotal role the ecosystem plays in their lives.
For example
, if you ask someone if he rather learns something to improve his performance at work or learn about untouched lands, savage life, forests, aquatic animals, and so on, the response would be that with work-related benefits.
This
 led to irresponsible, catastrophic, and destructive behaviours towards the environment.
Therefore
, it is crucial that
people
 acknowledge the
importance
 of
nature
.
Secondly
, introducing a subject that presents biodiversity and wildlife to children can be the solution to multiple issues of today's and tomorrow's as well. By teaching children the
importance
 and the pivotal role of preserving the balance of
nature
, many innocent creatures would be saved and our lives as well.
For instance
, children show more interest than adults and get excited about learning about the mystery hidden in oceans and landscapes.
Consequently
, the natural world
importance
 wouldn't be disregarded
anymore
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. In conclusion, humans often take for granted the services
nature
 is providing because their knowledge is very little, so raising a knowledgeable upcoming generation is the key to protecting the biodiversity of
this
 world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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