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Some people feel that the government should pay the costs of running universities so that a university education will be free for anyone who wants it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, tuition fees of
universities
 are extremely expensive to be afforded by middle-class parents who wish to send their children to university for
education
.
Hence
, some people believe that
government
 should subsidize the
universities
 for the expenses incurred by
it
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them
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, so that
universities
 may offer free
education
 to anyone. I,
however
, disagree with the view. Being rational, I believe that choosing the view will give birth to certain difficulties
such
 as an
increase
 in taxes,
shortage
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a shortage
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 of
universities
 and
its
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their
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 resources, and
increase
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an increase
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 in
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate.
Firstly
,
Government
 expenditures will significantly
increase
 if it starts providing financial grants to
universities
.
This
 will cause a deficit to the
Government
’s budget, and to overcome it, the
Government
 will
increase
 taxes which, effectively, will become a direct cost to the general public.
Moreover
, the
Government
 may
also
 reduce its spending on public development projects which will affect
public’s
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 living standard.
Secondly
, if
universities
’
education
 is made available to
everyone
 for free,
then
everyone
, who
are
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is
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 eligible, will try to get
enroll
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enrol
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them
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apply
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with
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on
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 the
universities
 which will eventually lead to scarce of
universities
 and
its
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their
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 resources. Presently,
universities
 are not prepared to absorb the impact of a sudden
increase
 in the number of admissions.
Last
 but not the least, making
universities
’
education
 available to
everyone
 will escalate the unemployment rate. The number of graduates from
universities
 will considerably
increase
 due to free
education
. Since, graduates from
universities
 demand jobs specific to their field,
such
 as marketing, finance, management, etc.
therefore
,
this
 will result in
the
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a
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 shortage of manpower for inferior jobs
,
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apply
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 and
surplus
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a surplus
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 of manpower in other field jobs.
Education
 has
a
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great importance in today’s world, and I believe obtaining an
education
 is
everyone
’s right, but one should struggle to achieve it,
instead
 of relying on the
government
. Making
education
 free to
everyone
 will create a good impression
in
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at
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the
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apply
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first
 sight,
however
, the aftermath of the decision will be dreadful.
Thus
, I am of the opinion that
government
 should not bear the cost of
the
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apply
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education
.
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