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Here, With the advancement of technology, social interaction among people has affected to a greater extent. What are the reasons of reduced social interaction? Suggest whether this would lead to a positive or negative effect in the future.

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Today, according to technological progress we witness communication among the
people
 is reduced than before,
this
 essay will check the positive and negative effects in the future. From my perspective, there are many positive aspects of the advancement of
technology
 and the human have to use them do not deny that
this
 progress lead to improve our lives and we can save time for our other works
such
 as online shopping and online restaurant,
furthermore
, the
technology
 could improve their life quality.
However
, the
technology
 can solve many of our problems but
on the other hand
, it produced a lot of problems for us, in
this
 days the
people
 are witnessing many illnesses that are related to moderns life the
people
 have less social activity compared to before and these issues lead to lack of mental health and lack of self-confidence the
people
 escape from each other and do not have any interaction with each other,
for example
, the
people
 interaction due to Corona pandemic is very less than before and the
people
 tried to handle many of need at home. In conclusion,
people
 are social creatures and the advancement of
technology
 should not be an obstacle in the way that they want to avoid interaction with other
people
 because for a long time
this
 matter created many mental diseases.
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