It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy. Do you agree or disagree?

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Since ancient

time

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the

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apply

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employment has been one of the most important

aspect

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of human

life

. Even today,

this

issue is still playing

crucial

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role in human

life

. Some

people

consider that it is better to be unemployed than to be employed if they don't enjoy their

work

. I totally

argee

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agree

with those

people

First

of all, doing unliked

work

is one kind of punishment for the

people

Therefore

, it is so stressful for

people

mind

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, spirituality and body.

In addition

, it will be ineffective and unsuccessful in the short and

long run

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when

people

don't like their

work

Moreover

people

should be happy with their

work

in order to reach their goals and

success

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becides

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besides

earn the money and make their lives.

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, some research

show

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that if

people

love and like their

work

the

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productivity of

work

will be improved and

satisfaction

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the satisfaction

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level of

people

will be increased. As well as,

people

spend most of their time and consume most of their energy

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their

work

Beacuse

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Because

of that,

people

are getting upset and

feeling

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feel

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stress

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deeply when they are not enjoying their

work

. In conclusion,

main

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purpose of human

life

being

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happily

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and

enjoyfull

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enjoy full

. So. if

people

don't enjoy their

work

they can change it

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if there is

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not

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possible

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to change their job it is better to stay at their home. Because

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there are a lot of good

chance

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and

opporunities

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opportunities

in our

life

Thus

life

is beautiful and

wonderfull

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wonderful

wonderfully

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