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Some people say patriotism causes problems and is negative overall. Others feel that it is beneficial for society at large. Do the advantages of patriotism outweight its disadvantages?

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Today, there are two attitudes in the society, some
people
 believe that patriotism overall is not good for society and someone else disagrees with the topic,
this
 essay will check the advantages and disadvantages and express my view in the end. On the one hand, there are many
people
 who are proud of their
country
 which is known as the Patriotism,
this
 is a really good feeling that a person loves our
country
,
furthermore
, who just see positive aspects of their
country
also
 it seems should encourage him, as well as not only
this
 opinion is very amazing but
also
this
 individual can be motivated on another person,
for example
, American
people
 very like to live in America because love is clear of their talk and can see many American flags that installed front of their house
also
 many of them express to that they do not want to trip to another
country
.
On the other hand
, other
people
 who were not satisfied with their
country
 at any time,
in addition
, they always have a complaint of any condition and they try to say about a bad situation that they have in their
country
,
for instance
, they always say
this
country
 has a lack of welfare and there is not any calm and peaceful and another thing like
this
 and some
people
 are reluctant for their
country
 future, of course,
this
 is related to their personalities. In conclusion. the
country
 that human is born in
that is
 a part of their identity,
however
, maybe even their
country
 was not really good, and despite
this
, they should not say bad about their
country
, in my opinion,
this
 is the perfect feature for an advanced
country
.
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