Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Technology brought many
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to humanity. One of
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is the possibility to fulfill our obligations
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as study and
work
, from the comfort of our own homes. I believe
that is
a positive development.
First
of all, if we do not need to go out to
work
or study, we can save a tremendous
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in traffic jams or in crowded public transportation,
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leads to more
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available
to do other activities
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spending
more
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with family, exercising or taking care of
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household
chores. My personal experience is a compelling example of
this
. In 2020, my boss asked me to
work
from home for 6 months while they made an office renovation. I saved 2 hours in my day and that gave me the opportunity to start working out and
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healthy weight.
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, the companies and schools can save money
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and buildings rents,
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is a considerable amount of the expenses.
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school
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of products could have a price
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benefiting everyone. A primer example is the" online ballet academy of little angels".
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a 100% online ballet academy, that
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a much
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lower price and give
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to many girls who would never have
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to pay for a traditional school of ballet. In conclusion, technology gave us the opportunity to
work
and study from home and because of that we can save
time
from
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and save money from rents of
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buildings
and offices. For
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I believe that it is a positive development.
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