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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism out weight its drawbacks?

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Nowadays, the majority of people all around the world spend their leisure time on trips and visiting historical or recreational places in different
countries
. The increasing rate of
tourism
 creates some advantages and difficulties for host
countries
.
Although
 boosting the
tourism
 industry will improve economic conditions, it will
also
 increase pollution and waste. In my opinion, the advantages of
tourism
 are far more despite having some disadvantages. The most significant benefit of
tourism
 is that
countries
 will improve their economy. Going to other
countries
 as a tourist will force you to spend a huge amount of money on different places
such
 as hotels, restaurants, malls and other tourist spots, so the governments give more taxes to owners.
For instance
, Malaysia as a developing country could develop its economic situation by only noticing the
tourism
 industry and has reduced the rate of inflation.
Moreover
, as a
second
 advantage,
tourism
 creates new job opportunities for locals.
Therefore
, the
tourism
 industry plays a crucial role in solving economic and social problems.
On the other hand
, there are many drawbacks as well. The remarkable drawback is unfortunately foreign visitors affect the environment and increase pollution and waste. They buy a variety of products and leave them in the nature.
For example
, in China, because of lots of local and strange visitors, the government has not controlled the amount of litter in different regions. The
next
 disadvantage is damaging historical places. Some sightseers do not pay attention to the value of monuments and write some sentences or words on them. To sum up, raising the
tourism
 rate creates positive and negative effects on
countries
.
Although
, the benefits are stronger than the drawbacks. In my opinion, it is better for all
countries
prepare
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 themselves for inviting lots of tourists to their
countries
 and managing the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • main source of income
  • revenue generation
  • cultural exchange
  • employment opportunities
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental degradation
  • wildlife disruption
  • cultural erosion
  • seasonal dependency
  • global crisis
  • off-peak seasons
  • social disruption
  • overcrowding
  • local economies
  • touristic demand
  • local traditions
  • quality of life
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