You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter give details of your visit to the restaurant explain the reason for the celebration say what was good about the food and the service
Dear Sir Alland,
I am writing
this
letter to thank you for your hospitality on 26 September, when I booked your restaurant for our company
celebration.
First,
I did some research to choose some restaurants which could accommodate the members of our company
and expect to have good quality food. Finally
, I found your restaurant which I think can be a good choice to hold the celebration of our company
with 200 people attending it.
Our sales had reached the target revenue, therefore
we decided to arrange an event. Moreover
, our teams had been given some extra budget to spend on. On top of that, our company
wanted to make a memorable moment to be remembered and increased our working spirits.
To be honest, I have tried some foods which are very good and lingering in my mouth. Besides
, your dishes are more special on the occasion as it was very delightful and tasty compared to one that I have ever had before. Also
, I was surprised by the excellent performance of your waiters and waitresses because they served us politely and with a proper way of serving the food at each table.
Therefore
, I would like to thank you for your hospitality, and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
StevinSubmitted by riani.the2 on
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task achievement
In the second paragraph, avoid redundancy by not repeating the same information in different sentences, such as explaining the search and choice process of the restaurant in more detailed steps.
coherence cohesion
Revise the third paragraph to make the sentence flow smoother. For example, instead of 'On top of that, our company wanted to make a memorable moment to be remembered and increased our working spirits,' consider rephrasing to 'On top of that, our company wanted to create a memorable moment to boost our working spirits.'
task achievement
Revise the phrase 'very good and lingering in my mouth' to something more natural, such as 'extremely delicious and left a lasting impression.'
task achievement
You provided a clear and detailed account of your visit, which addresses the task effectively.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a logical structure and flows well from one point to the next.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are both appropriately used and polite.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite