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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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These days, there are many
species
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 of
animals
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, which are in danger of disappearance or even
extinction
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.
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 is mainly due to the widespread distribution of hunting, including rare wild animal hunting, and deforestation. There are some possible solutions,
such
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 as making more strict laws about poaching and spreading information about rare
species
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 among
people
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. One obvious reason for the disappearance of wild
animals
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 is uncontrollable hunting, especially in poor countries.
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, there are many black markets, where poachers can sell their prey and earn a big amount of money, which gives them huge motivation to continue their illegal activity.
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, the number of rare animal hunters increase constantly over the
last
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 years, and more and more
animals
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 disappear.
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, government politics can
also
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 be a cause of the
extinction
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 of wild
animals
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, and an evident example is
deforestation
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a deforestation
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. Big factories require more and more raw materials and territories for their manufacturing, which means the destruction of wild forests and jungles. In consequence, many wild
animals
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 lose their houses and food source and turn out in danger. There are two effective solutions to
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 problem.
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, governments should create more strict and rigorous laws, which will give a big punishment for
people
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, who are making illegal hunting.
This
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 should
also
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 touch secret markets and buyers of parts of
animals
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, which will lead to a lack of benefits and a risk of punishment for poachers. Another solution is spreading information about rare
species
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 via television or the internet.
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, zoos can create educational shows for children and exhibitions of different
species
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 of
animals
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.
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,
people
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 will be more interested in donating money to reservation and protection projects, which can save
animals
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 from
extinction
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. In conclusion, the problem of the disappearance of rare
animals
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 is very important for our environment.
People
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 should concentrate more efforts to protect wild nature from
extinction
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.
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