More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation, Describe some of the problems over reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.
In
this
fast-paced era, majority of the individuals are preferring
their own cars to travel from one place to another. Wrong verb form
prefer
This
situation can lead to drastic changes in the air quality, moreover
can also
result in huge traffic jams. However
, these issues can be dealt with by encouraging the public to use public transport or by car-pooling.
As a large number of human beings are choosing to relocate themselves by using personal vehicles, the emission rate of greenhouse gases can also
increase significantly due to
this
. For instance
, the data regarding atmospheric pollution in Delhi saw a jump after huge figures in car sales was
noticed in 2017. Another problem caused by Change the verb form
were
this
is the increase in the situations of traffic congestion which sometimes also
contributes to various quarrels and violence between individuals.
To put a halt to the disturbances caused by the aforementioned situation, the ruling authority should intervene by launching campaigns to educate residents about the ill impacts of this
. In addition
, certain rules should be adopted to limit the number of vehicles on road
. Correct article usage
the road
For example
, Delhi's Chief Minister after looking at the bad condition of the air introduced a rule in which it is mentioned that on а particular day
only cars with odd numbers on their registration plates are allowed for travelling purposes and the same for the vehicles with even digits on their plates. Add a comma
day,
Thus
, this
solution not only limited the number of automobiles but also
introduced the habit of car-pooling and citizens started choosing public transport over their own automobiles. Owing to these facts such
strategies should be implemented to prevent any negative circumstances.
Or conclusion, the over-dependence of mankind on private cars can be disastrous to air quality and can also
cause social disturbances like fights in case of traffic Jams. For the prevention of these situations, the government should be aware public and develop laws and rules.Submitted by sandysarai on
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Task Response
You have addressed the task by discussing the problems of over-reliance on cars and suggesting a possible solution. Make sure to focus more on the specific problems caused by over-reliance on cars in the body paragraphs to enhance task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are well-developed, providing a clear overview of the essay. Ensure that each body paragraph focuses on one main problem caused by over-reliance on cars and provides supporting details to maintain coherence and cohesion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that provide a good overview of the essay.
Task Achievement
Relevant example of Delhi's pollution issue and the implementation of alternate-day vehicle usage rule to address the problem.