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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Nowadays, there has commonly been a huge amount of debate about whether
foreign
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language
 speakers not only may face social problems, but
also
 practical problems. I partially agree
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 argument for some reasons.
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 both obstacles. It is clear that
language
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 barrier will affect our communication in a foreign country since
language
 is one of the most crucial
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 in transferring information. Miscommunication due to
language
 limitation will lead to
misundertand
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misunderstand
 in
intrerpretating
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interpreting
interpretation
 a message.
For instance
, the usage of idioms is not so common for foreigners which might be translated differently. When it
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, sometimes it will potentially
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 to insult our interlocutors
then
 they might avoid
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 a conversation with you.
On the other hand
, I assume that
language
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 for practical use will not be as big as the previous
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 due to
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 advances. As the clear
ilustration
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illustration
, we only need to write what things we want to say by using
google
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 translate application which can be integrated with
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 feature nowadays.
However
,
although
 those applications can ease our difficulty, we need to understand the basic level of
language
 to make us at least can do our daily life. Governments
also
 need to support
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applicant
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 ability before accepting
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visa
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. In summary,
language
 inability will affect our social activities which potentially harm our relationship with foreigners.
However
, the situation might be different with the help of
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 advances for practical use.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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