In many countries , a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country , but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level .Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many countries , a small number of
people
(communities, populations, societies) earn (an) extremely high
salary
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salaries
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(
fee
, pay, earning). Some
people
(community
population
society
) believe that
this
is good for the
country
(agrarian, bucolic, homey) , but others think that
governments
should not allow
salaries
(
fee
, pay,
earnings
) above a certain level. Only a small portion of
people
(community
population
society
) earn excessively high
salaries
(
fee
, pay,
earnings
) in many countries. The most(most
yok
) biggest impact of
this
statement is increasing competition to grow up their
country
. individuals who are staying back (in) the(the
yok
)
this
race, be jealous(kıskanç) to(of) (a) productive
people
(community
population
society
) but if the
governments
don’t allow a highly(high)
salaries
(
fee
, pay,
earnings
) , (the) criminal event(s) will be able to decrease because of equal
people
. With an
increasing
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,increasing
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the
salaries
(
fee
, pay,
earnings
) of some
people
(
communityies
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communities
population
society
), everybody try(tries) to find innumerable new resources to be rich which impacts of(of
yok
) human lives positively and they not only become rich and
also
become their
country
.
For instance
, America has 250 million individuals maybe even more, but only a small portion of
people
is intelligent, just 10 million. if we move to
this
(these)
people
to another
country
, the new America will be. because their contribution(katkı) is (the) explicit benefit of(to) the
country
.In return for
this
(Bunun
karşılığında)
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,karşılığında)
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they just want to(to
yok
)
money
(a bill) to increase (their) quality of life.
On the other
hand
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,hand
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many
people
(societies) think(s) that the(the
yok
)
governments
(politics) should not allow
to be
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being
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(to be
yok
) the
ultra rich
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ultra-rich
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(ultra-rich) humans. I partly agree with
this
statement because there are many advantages
of
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apply
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(to)
this
opinion. Maybe the
governments
who(that) look(s) like(like
yok
)
a
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an
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(a
yok
) powerless can receive the bribe(rüşvet) so the criminals will be able to get comfortable. The most impact of(of
yok
) way to obstruct(engellemek) for(for
yok
)
this
issue is given(to give) (the) same
money
to everyone. In conclusion, the(the
yok
)
money
is very important for lots of
people
(communities populations
society
) because everyone
want
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wants
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(s) to
good
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the good
a good
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life. only one way to gain is (the) added value(
katma
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karma
kama
değer).
Although
most
people
want everyone to be equal,
money
is necessary to go more(more
yok
)
further
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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