In many countries , a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country , but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level .Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In many countries , a small number of
people
(communities, populations, societies) earn (an) extremely high salary
(Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
fee
, pay, earning). Some people
(community population
society
) believe that this
is good for the country
(agrarian, bucolic, homey) , but others think that governments
should not allow salaries
(fee
, pay, earnings
) above a certain level. Only a small portion of people
(community population
society
) earn excessively high salaries
(fee
, pay, earnings
) in many countries. The most(most yok
) biggest impact of this
statement is increasing competition to grow up their country
. individuals who are staying back (in) the(the yok
) this
race, be jealous(kıskanç) to(of) (a) productive people
(community population
society
) but if the governments
don’t allow a highly(high) salaries
(fee
, pay, earnings
) , (the) criminal event(s) will be able to decrease because of equal people
.
With an increasing
the Add a comma
,increasing
salaries
(fee
, pay, earnings
) of some people
(communityies
Correct your spelling
communities
population
society
), everybody try(tries) to find innumerable new resources to be rich which impacts of(of yok
) human lives positively and they not only become rich and also
become their country
. For instance
, America has 250 million individuals maybe even more, but only a small portion of people
is intelligent, just 10 million. if we move to this
(these) people
to another country
, the new America will be. because their contribution(katkı) is (the) explicit benefit of(to) the country
.In return for this
(Bunun karşılığında)
they just want to(to Add a comma
,karşılığında)
yok
) money
(a bill) to increase (their) quality of life.
On the other
hand
many Add a comma
,hand
people
(societies) think(s) that the(the yok
) governments
(politics) should not allow to be
(to be Change the verb form
being
yok
) the ultra rich
(ultra-rich) humans. I partly agree with Add a hyphen
ultra-rich
this
statement because there are many advantages of
(to) Change preposition
apply
this
opinion. Maybe the governments
who(that) look(s) like(like yok
) a
(a Change the article
an
yok
) powerless can receive the bribe(rüşvet) so the criminals will be able to get comfortable. The most impact of(of yok
) way to obstruct(engellemek) for(for yok
) this
issue is given(to give) (the) same money
to everyone.
In conclusion, the(the yok
) money
is very important for lots of people
(communities populations society
) because everyone want
(s) to Change the verb form
wants
good
life. only one way to gain is (the) added value(Add an article
the good
a good
katma
değer). Correct your spelling
karma
kama
Although
most people
want everyone to be equal, money
is necessary to go more(more yok
) further
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