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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #bout #history #house #research
As an individual, I have always set myself the task of not following the crowd and being unique. Growing up in Uzbekistan, a developing country in Central Asia, I persuaded myself to explore means of breaking out of the cycle- education. It all started when 7-years-old I, with a desperate desire to teach my dolls, was given a
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still frequently quote today / Education is for everyone.’ Having taught people from various backgrounds, from a deaf girl to a boy from the US, I realize how deep the prime meaning of
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 was unique in their own way and was going to change the world for the better, yet being prevented by some external factors,
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 as gender, ethnicity, and income level. The way through I kept asking myself :’Are these external factors valuable enough to define who these people are?’ Why
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school to look after a sibling his parents can not afford a nurse for? Some people would say that it is life circumstances, I would say that it is
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discrimination. Anyways, my goal is not to argue how to call it but to bring it to the end. By educating myself and others, I will contribute the best I have towards creating
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 world with no discrimination,
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