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has 206 bones
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different sizes and shapes holding the other organs and
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together. Intrinsically, bones can repair themselves during a specific time period[1].
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, or traumatic accidents, the process of healing may not occur or gets lengthy[2]. One of the most common
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diseases that can cause severe
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loss and infections is
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cancer
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. Despite the development of medical sciences,
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is still a threatening health issue. Surgery, chemotherapy, and radiotherapy are common methods for treating
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[3]. These treatments have some drawbacks that could be harmful and endanger healthy
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in chemotherapy and causing large
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defects after removing
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tumors
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in surgery[3].
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may not occur,
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cells
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surrounding the healthy
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recurrence1. In recent years, investigations have shown that
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can kill human
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cells
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including
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cells
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which are more sensitive to
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than healthy
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[4]. Utilizing
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to eliminate or diminish
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is called hyperthermia treatment. Commonly, there are several approaches to
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within the
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by
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which is done by
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phenomenon
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rooted in the interaction of the material with light, so it depends on the optical properties of the material[5]. Photothermal therapy (PTT) has certain advantages over other methods,
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an attractive means of tackling
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certain materials with the ability
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light into
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. Metallic particles with diverse shapes, carbon-based nanoparticles, semiconductors, and organic compounds are
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substances[5]. In the
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decade, many researchers have spent their effort
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a series of
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that not only do have the ability to remove
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tumors
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through PTT but
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possess different biological properties in order to reduce
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of their use. A group of
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called ‘bioglass’ which were
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are known for their intrinsic ability of bonding with
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forming a hydroxyapatite-like layer on their surface when
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to biological fluids.
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can regenerate
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damaged or lost tissue, alongside their
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optical features. To reap the benefits of
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and optical properties of these distinguished
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simultaneously, numerous studies have been conducted. In one of these, Wang et al. introduced a bismuth-doped phosphosilicate glass that could invert the growth of a type of rat
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osteosarcoma
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through photothermal therapy and were
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able to regenerate the damaged
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tissue2. In another research, a sol-gel bioactive glass containing 5%molar manganese
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loaded with chlorin e6 to combine photodynamic and photothermal therapies by irradiating the sample with 660nm and 808nm laser, respectively, for
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of tumorous
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defects3. Ironically, manganese is a trace element that has proven to be a great agent in the growth of hard
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by promoting osteogenic reactions and greatly affecting
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regeneration due to increasing osteoblast response and cell adhesion and proliferation11-16. In
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regard, bioactive
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have been determined as promising agents for delivering and sustained release of therapeutic ions in the
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fluids microenvironment due to their biodegradability.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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