Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opionion.

The adverse effects which have been done by
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the public. People hold
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of whether some measures can be done to solve the situation. From my perspective, it is true that some changes permanently affect the biosystem, but there
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still a wide range of solutions which can help improve biodiversity. It cannot be denied that mankind
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done irreversible
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to the environment, which
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caused the extinction of many
species
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, the
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of the mountains which contain natural resources,
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as coal, gas and metal, seems unavoidable. Since
such
behaviour seriously damages animals' habitats, some
species
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out. During the
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process, the flora of that area may
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the verge of extinction. If some
species
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, I am convinced that the public
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able to find a way to protect the creatures which face a high risk of
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out. Recent decades have seen a rising awareness of biosystem conservation,
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the governments and the public have made concerted efforts to that. One popular action is that many rare
species
are raised by specialists in zoos or other special sites, which plays a significant role in conserving animals and plants. Another conducive action is that in order to protect natural habitats, overexploit is now banned in many countries.
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impact on mankind. In my opinion,
although
some damages can not be solved, a wide range of activities are worth to be taken to improve biodiversity. Under no circumstances can we stop finding out ways to solve ecological problems.
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