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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Nowadays, it has been an issue about whether foreigners who can't speak the local
language
 tend to struggle not only in social life but
also
 in practical activities. Regarding
this
 matter, I partially agree with the statement for some reasons and
this
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problem
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. Miscommunication is the main reason behind social disputes, occurring because of the
language
 barrier.
As
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the
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 example, the usage of idioms is not so common for people with limited skills which potentially
cause
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 misinterpretation. If the situation happens many times, it will impact
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people's willingness to have a conversation with us. They tend to avoid
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having discussions so it can make us feel inferior. Some countries have solved it by asking for a
language
 proficiency test before visitors can get their visas.
On the other hand
, the problem in practical activities will not be as big as social things since the appearance of smartphones.
For instance
, if we just come to a new country, we can be helped by the presence of google translate and its speech-to-text feature. By using
this
 technology, we just need to open our phone,
then
 we can speak in our common way
This
 is a condition that we could not find ten years ago when foreigners still count on a printed dictionary. In summary, it is true that social problems may occur due to
language
 limitations.
However
, countries and organizations can minimize it by requesting a
language
 requirement document before permission is given.
In contrast
 with that, the obstacle in practical things will not appear as much as the previous
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 with the help of technological advances.
Therefore
, I support the idea about social problems are the priority to be solved before coming to a new country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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