In some area of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of door after particular time at night unless they accompanied by an adult.

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In some parts of
America
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a
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is to be imposed,
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it has not been imposed in Canada after independence. There should be a
backgoround
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background
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curfew
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.
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& cons of it.
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of
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curfews may not be imposed in safe areas. The safe area is related to that area which has a low crime rate and people are moving around safely. If the teenagers go out at night to the unsafe areas they might be in danger, and
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they may be involved in drugs, rape, and robbery . In
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scenario the parent should be teaching his child not to allow him outside in unsafe areas at night and
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they can watch their children's "Inn and out" timing. If a
teenager
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is involved in any crime it will destroy his
life
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and future.
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impact
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effect
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affect
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country's
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the country's
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growth & economy. ,
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the
curfew
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has a negative impact on
teenager
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life
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. They can not go to sports and some teenagers are working at night in the library and some are going for jobs, which is
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hardel for teenagers. If an emergency or health problem, they can not go to the hospital on time.
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is
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impacts business,
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affects the economy and currency will go down for
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reason.As we know
teenager
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is the root of the country If they will not go out and perform their activities like sports, and education,business
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the growth of the country will stop. In the ,end the
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is a bad impact on the
teenager
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's
life
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and
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lose their confidence and good and bad in
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