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Some people believe the mass media have too much influence over people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As communications technology improves, there is no doubt that
mass
media
 like television, radio and
internet
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 have an increasing
influence
 on the lives of everybody. Some
people
 think
this
influence
 is positive as it allows freedom of choice, but many
people
 worry that
this
 situation has a negative impact on society. I strongly agree with the
second
 opinion and will discuss below the reasons why. There are several key reasons why the
influence
 of
mass
media
 is negative. The
first
 reason is political; the owners of newspapers, television stations, etc. are very rich and powerful and only give news and opinions which support their political
view
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views
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. I believe
this
 can be very dangerous for
people
’s freedom because different opinions are not discussed and we receive only one side of an argument. The
second
 main problem is that
mass
media
 destroy creativity. It is a fact that everybody wants to copy what is fashionable, but if only one view of the world is presented in the
media
, there is no room for different cultures and ideas.
This
 leads to a
further
 problem in that we may lose independent thought which could lead to a society full of
people
 who behave like robots.
Therefore
, in my opinion, the world becomes a much more boring place. Some
people
 will argue that the
influence
 of
mass
media
 is positive because
people
 obviously feel good sharing the same experience with millions of others. It is my belief,
however
, that the negative aspects are much greater than the positive because if everybody does and thinks the same thing, all the richness and variety of life will be lost.
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