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Some people say that traveling abroad is necessary to get knowledge about other countries, while others suggest that TV and the internet can also help people know about foreign countries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Travelling is a leisure activity which is very popular these days due to the affordability of
people
 and their desire to visit different places around the world. Travelling plays an essential role in our lives because we get to explore new areas and nations as well as learn about new cultures and traditions.
On the other hand
, some
people
 are of the favour that we can learn about the foreign countries through
TV
 and the
internet
.
This
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finally
 my view on them.  Travelling has boosted the economy of many countries by promoting tourism across the globe. Not only the economy
,
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 but
also
 the knowledge of individuals improve by getting a tour of different regions on earth. Individuals
also
 get to experience and learn about
new
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 community and their culture, festivals, clothing, food, weather and so on.
For example
, when I travel to India, I get to see
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vibrant festivals like Diwali with lots of lights and colours.
In addition
, I get to taste the delicious Indian cuisine while meeting
people
 of various values and traditions. Visiting one country is not only about the place but
also
 about experiencing all the other cultural parts of it.
In contrast
, some individuals are of the view that
TV
 and the
internet
 are sufficient to know about one country.
This
 is true to some extent as we have seen during the pandemic, where
people
 have been unable to travel abroad due to restrictions and
therefore
, relied heavily on
TV
 and the
internet
 to explore new places around the world.
Furthermore
, we have learnt a lesson that sometimes we do not need to spend so much in order to explore a nation as long as we have the interest to do so. To conclude, I am of the opinion that travelling is an exciting adventure and I personally like to travel physically to a country to find out more about it.
However
, if the circumstances are not appropriate
then
 we have learnt a new way of exploring beautiful places around the world through the
internet
 or the
TV
. Travelling should be a personal choice of a person and nobody should be forced to think one way or the other about it.
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