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Some people think that the fast-food industry has had negative effects on health issues, the environment, and family eating habits. Do you agree or disagree?.

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Some people contend that the junk
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 industry causing detrimental effects on consumers’
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 and
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 negative development has impacted not only the environment as well as it has changed drastically the way family members eating habits. I advocate these viewpoints and I will argue in
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 essay on what are the consequences that lead to
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 deterioration, and environmental problems and demoralize the values of the families feasting together and preferring ready-made unhealthy
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 items.
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 of all, obesity is one of the main contentious
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 in society. Overeating unhealthy and junk
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 has caused
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 deterioration problems which have rampantly increased in Children and adults of the USA and
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 the reason, American are becoming fatter people around the world.
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, there are massive
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issues
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 as heart attack, brain stroke, and high blood pressure, and all are associated with the obesity problem.
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, it has been environmental
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, many animals are killed or Boucher on daily basis. It seems to be threatening the animal and the species number. If
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 is continued, there is the possibility that domestic animals
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 as cows, and chickens will be extinct in the future. Other than that, the coal consumption in restaurants and other waste materials disposes of from these factories outside are an example of environmental degradation.
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, people tend to eat out at restaurants these days. The ready-made
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 items are available on the streets, at Malls, and in other markets.
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, many companies providing door to door services
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 as
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 panda, MacDonald, and Pizzahut. Due to
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 accessibility, these companies provoke more
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issues
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.
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, family members are avoiding having a feast together at home. To sum up, I believe that the consumption of unhealthy and junk
meal
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 creates adverse
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issues
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, environment, and human
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. If government instigates to close the fast
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 industries, these obstacles would be tackled easily.

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