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In recent years, online shopping has become increasingly popular. Some people think such a shopping method is beneficial, while others believe it creates more problems than it solves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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technology, shopping means have changed a lot as online shopping is gaining popularity in
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society. Though some
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 online shopping is beneficial more due to better
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 and delivery options, others believe that it may be easy to deceive
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 online shopping a suitable option as it brings many discount offers.
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 can choose various payment options like
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card
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 banking to get
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discount
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 which can save a lot of money.
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, with
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 can purchase things from any country
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 the world and they can receive the items at
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door step
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 too.
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down
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the transportation cost and tiredness of standing in lines.
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, a survey conducted by The Guardian newspaper, in March
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 2015 clearly unveiled that online shopping had gained thousands of customers because it had numerous cost and delivery offers. On the other side,
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 of
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society
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 that shopping through online websites can be perilous in terms of misuse of personal information. As many online shopping applications and sites ask for personal information like bank account
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 and details, hackers can use
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,
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 pay the amount mostly on the basis of trust whereas many online shopping websites are fake and they do not deliver the ordered things.
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, about 10000 cases have been filed in Cyber Crime Department against online shopping websites by customers as they were deceived by these sites. To conclude, it is unequivocally clear that even though some
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the
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increasing
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 find it an attractive
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 to be used. I personally
beileve
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believe
 that online shopping can be an effective
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 to be adopted as it can save a lot amount of customers and easy to deliver ordered items
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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