The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of the high street shops. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In recent years, the growth of online shopping
is
Verb problem
has
show examples
leading
Wrong verb form
led
show examples
to the shutting down of many smaller
businesses
. Though I see that many educated adults prefer to use the Internet via websites and cell phones for their purchases, I believe there is a market segment of elderly people and an uneducated population for street shops.
To begin
with, the significance of procuring goods online increased during the
covid
Correct your spelling
COVID-19
pandemic period. People started to realise the benefits of reduced waiting time, increased ease of selection and improved productivity of lives by ordering things online.
For instance
, our family started to buy groceries and vegetables using BigBasket where we can have the smart list ready from past purchases, and the whole procurement can be finished in a few minutes by simply adding the items to the cart. Henceforth, e-shopping provides extreme benefits of significantly saving time and providing a contact-less purchase to keep one safe from
corona
Correct your spelling
coronavirus
show examples
spread.
As a result
of these benefits, the growth rate of online shopping is rapid and threatening to small
businesses
.
While
the educated section of society is very comfortable using computers and smartphones to order goods online, the uneducated and elderly section of society prefers to go to local markets for their shopping. Not only that these people find it difficult to upgrade themselves to an online mode of buying things but
also
they find that prices are not reasonable enough to negotiate with vendors
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
the local market.
For example
, my parents still prefer to visit nearby shops to buy an item for the satisfaction of bargaining it for a discount. As street vendors do not add transportation costs to the purchase price, there is still a demand for buying goods from them and it is still preferred by the lower-income groups.
For
this
reason, I believe these markets do not vanish completely
due to
the emergence of online
businesses
. In conclusion, I believe the local shops in towns and cities still hold their value by offering reasonable prices and bargains and would not be easily superseded by online
businesses
, though it might happen in
far-future
Correct your spelling
the future
show examples
when everyone in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society becomes educated and elevated in their social status.
Submitted by nkamatam on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Ensure a more balanced approach by acknowledging the potential impact of online shopping on high street shops for all demographics.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of ideas by enhancing the clarity of the introduction and conclusion. Ensure that the main points are logically presented and supported throughout the essay.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: