Some people believe the violence in the media such as in television programs and films directly results in violent behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays there is a
believe
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belief
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that
media
connected with force (like TV programs and
films
) is able to have an influence on the audience and in some cases it involves
people
to be
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being
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criminals. From my point of view, it is true, so I absolutely agree with the given opinion. The
first
reason why I have
this
opinion is that now
people
are influenced by social
media
, games and
films
. It can change or construct thinking about violence. The
second
one
is that some
people
can live in a
media
space and forget about real
life
. So it is reasonable to say that modern
life
is closely connected with
media
.
Media
such
as TV programs and
films
has a significant impact on
people
who watch them.
For example
, on the
Internet
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there is a lot of information about situations when
people
do something because it was shown in the film so they think it is true and they should do the same
actions
. Another reason is about living in an imagined world. Some
people
are not able to differ from
real
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real-life
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life
maybe it is because they find imagined
one
more interesting and comfortable.
For example
, now we have problems across the globe connected with addiction to games
such
as GTA. More and more
people
prefer to play
this
game but a lot of them can mix the game world and real
life
. So
actions
such
as violence which are like the goal of the game are able to be used in reality. To conclude, we have various
media
which include information about violence and it can be
one
of the reasons why
people
are involved in violent
actions
. I am of the opinion that it is so because nowadays
media
play an important role in our lives and
as a result
, it has
asignificant
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a significant
impact on our thoughts. Another
one
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reason why I think so is
people
’s ability to dive into an artificial world. So we are able to forget about reality and do
actions
from
films
or games.
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