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Modern technology is changing our world. It has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication; it also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
 contemporary world,
technology
 has become a major key factor
for
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 our life.
Moreover
, with
this
 automation
era
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 we have opportunities to get advantages like communication
wit
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 each other, while as a flip of the coin,
also
 turn as a drawback
such
 as
use
 to destroy cultures because of selfish and useless matters. I believe,
computer based
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 science
provide
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 more valuable elements rather than
it's
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 downsides.In
this
 essay, I want to explain what are the positive and negative
effect
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,
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uses
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the uses
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 of
technology
.
To begin
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 majority of
human
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humans
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 are able to get various information and access through
this
technology
. Of course,
tele-communication
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telecommunication
telecommunications
 is one of the best usage
module
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 among
public
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.
For example
, students who are abroad without their family members, frequently conversate with their loved ones to make strong relationships with each other.
For instance
, in
this
 covid-19
pandamic
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pandemic
 period, employers
use
 to do their job assignments through digital platforms.
Such
 as nowadays, school children do their educational studies through e-learning platforms.
Therefore
,
technology
 will allow more positive results for our life because it has
wider
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 range of possible good factors.
On the other hand
, as long as some persons have detrimental views and inferior habits, they gain technological tools and access to create unhealthy
background
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backgrounds
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 and issues in the community.
For example
, racists who want to break peace and humanity among people,
they
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gain digital services to develop their notions and negativities. Wherever
,
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 human beings usually
use
 social media. it may sometimes become
more
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 miserable stage when cultures would be destroyed by bad users. In conclusion, If we
use
technology
 for our personal
developments
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development
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, like
job related
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 projects and studies, it will
definetely
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definitely
 impact in a beneficial manner in our life. Unless
,
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 we gain detrimental information through
this
.
However
, it will become more
benefit
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 and advantageous.I believe,
technology
 has positive reactions than Negative results.
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