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Write a letter of complaint about a proposal to build a new road through your local park

Dear Sir /
Madame
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, I am writing to you on behalf of the “A”
area
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 representative regarding the proposal of constructing
new
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a new
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road
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 through the “A” local
park
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area
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. There are both positive and negative sides to residents and the environment. We agree that the new
road
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 provides enormous benefits to the local community.
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, there are more negatives impact that we would like to address as follow.
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, it might improve accessibility to the city
area
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 and reduce congestion, but it is just in the short term. Once it is easy to access, more or bigger
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road
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roads
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, might cause bottlenecks in the city
area
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 and eventually caused more traffic and pollution in the long term.
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, new
road
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 construction caused more air and noise pollution during constructing and
implementing
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 period that could take 3-5 years.
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 will increase the high level of air pollution (PM2.5) that we are facing right now.
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 is
high
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 impact
to
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 residents’
wellbeing
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well-being
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 and nature destroyed but the local
park
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 can help to reduce these problems.
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, trees and local
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park
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parks
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 are more essential. It can help to improve the quality of the breathing air, control temperature and humidity and is the only green space where residents can enjoy nature and create
outdoor
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an outdoor
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activity
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activities
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 for family and children. In our point of view, encouraging people to use public transport by more investing in “
park
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 and ride” could be one of
options
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the options
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. The parking
area
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 nearby the sky train or underground train or bus station
that
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where
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 people can
park
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 their car and catch public transport to work.
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 can reduce the congestion in the city, shorten
time
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the time
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 to commute and reduce
polluted
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polluting
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 emissions from
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the vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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.
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,
this
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 can cut down the scale, investment and time period of construction. After all, we are impressed with the local government’s development plan in order to modernize our community
area
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. We would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you can reconsider the development plan or have any
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 community discussion. We are looking forward to hearing from you on
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 matter. Thank you Best Regards,

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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