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Eating meat is harmful to the health. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #health
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It is a
controvertial
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controversial
 topic that whether
meet
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meat
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products
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 are good for
health
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 or not. I vehemently espouse that having
meat
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 in
diet
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a diet
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 is perilous as it may contain numerous animal ailments and bad preservatives.
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 with, eating
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 can be harmful
for
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 any person if
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 is taken from animals with dangerous diseases.
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, Bird-flu and Swine-flu are the reasons for the death of a lot of people in the past few years.
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 to it, inadequate
method
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 of processing
of
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apply
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meat
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products
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 can jeopardize the situation more. When companies are not having
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hygiene
hygein
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the hygein
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 of these
products
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 in their mind,
such
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products
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 can adversely impact
on
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human
health
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.
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, since a large number of food companies have been using a number of preservatives to store
meat
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products
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 for a longer period of time, these substances can be the culprit behind many
health
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 issues in humans. Apparently, though
meat
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products
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 have less nutritional value than vegetarian food
products
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,
addition
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 of
such
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 chemicals can almost ruin the hormonal balance too in humans. A survey conducted by The Guardian newspaper, in March 2015 clearly revealed that 75% of people suffered from many problems like stone, high blood pressure and inadequate level of vitamins when they added just
meat
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products
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in
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 the food. To conclude, it is
unequivoal
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unequivocal
 that
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products
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 are manifestly a
debateable
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debatable
 topic that these have
positive
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a positive
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 impact or negative impact on human
health
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.
However
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, I
strongly
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 against
the
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apply
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meat
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 product because
such
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products
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 may
containes
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contain
contains
 harmful ailments and chemicals that are bad for mankind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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