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some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are tge advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

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Family businesses are quite popular in many countries. While some people believe that they have a higher chance of success others argue that
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 method will lead to many problems in the future. In my opinion, family businesses have certain pros and cons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. Integrity and profound loyalty are the major advantages of running a family
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. The family
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 will always stay together during any ups and downs of their
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 rather than quitting
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the existing
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 during the non-profitable stage.
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 to that, the young generation born
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 the
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 family is more familiar with
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planning, human resources management, sales management, and financial management.
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, they are capable enough of running the
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 in any circumstance. All the
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 will always work hand in hand for a common goal. The
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 profit and losses are distributed among the family
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 according to stipulated terms and conditions.
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, the family-owned
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 is not always successful, because there are many disputes related to profit sharing, outside recruitment, and discussion making involved in
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, the young generation is more likely to be irresponsible and immature. Sometimes family
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 are not truly interested in joining the family
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 but do so anyway because it is expected of them. The result is apathetic, unengaged employees. To conclude, a well-defined family-owned
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 will thrive for a long period.
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, the family that runs their own
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 must ensure that disagreements between family
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 are resolved before they turn into a
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 crisis.
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