In many countries proportion of older people is steadily increasing . Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on society?

It has been observed that in many nations the
numbers
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of elderly
people
are constantly proliferating. I
,
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beleive
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that
this
trend
have
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more
reparcussions
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repercussions
on the community, which will outline in
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paragraphs with reasons and examples. To embark, there are many demerits behind rising the older generation in society.
Firstly
,
economy
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the economy
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of
country
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the country
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is significantly reduce
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.
This
is to state that, aged
people
may not able to contribute
into
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the work as efficiently as
younger
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the younger
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generation.
Also
, they may not able to adopt
a
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modern technology to
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output and performance.
Therefore
, multinational companies based on government are not able to generate good revenue.
Thus
, the financial
gowth
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growth
of
nation
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the nation
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is impaired;
couriers
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economy decline.
For example
, in the USA, senior citizens are rising in numbers, which possess a threat to the nation about financial crises.
Moreover
,
unemployment
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rate is gradually
increases
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. To elaborate on
this
, as the older
people
increasing
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they continue with their work till later stage of lives.
As a result
, the cut-throat competition will take place in
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market. The younger
generation
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not able to find
suitable
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job
position
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in organizations.
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, in
developed
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nation, the
uk
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UK
, it is commonly seen that owning
to
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many aged
people
are continuing their
job
in
thier
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their
sixties ergo youngsters may not find vacancies. In conclusion, it can be commented that rising numbers of elderly can lead to
negatively
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impact on
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overall financial development of
community
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the community
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and
increasing
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competition in
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the
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job
market.
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