In some societies it is becoming too common for fathers to stay at home and look after children while mothers going to work. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative development?

For years, mothers had been viewed as the ones who played the integral role in taking care of children and doing house chores, but recently fathers are replacing their positions. There are various rationales behind
this
phenomenon, and
although
it has both positive and negative sides to it, I am convinced that the negative aspects are far more critical. The reasons for fathers staying home while mothers
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are many. One cause is the higher chance of
females
getting recruited.
This
is because they have a higher level of education compared to
males
and it can be clearly observed by their higher enrollment in universities. Another reason for them getting hired easier is the lower wage they usually have.
For example
, a female interior designer is paid less than her male peers with the same academic qualifications in
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same position. So it is needless to say that employers prefer to hire
females
further
than
males
. Apart from
this
, women are more eager to work outside and have independency these days. The logic behind it is the
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years of dependency they experienced under the power of men, which has directly contributed to the refusal
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staying
at home and being ruled by
males
.
Although
this
phenomenon is a positive development for
females
, there are some negative impacts that can not be overlooked.
First
of all,
males
usually do not have the essential
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characteristics
needed for looking after a child.
For instance
, nurturing a child requires patience and a sense of responsibility which is often more compatible with the personality of
females
.
Consequently
, children being raised by fathers might suffer from the probable temper tantrum
as a result
of
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mimicking
their father's behaviours.
On the other hand
, there are plenty of occupations that can be executed better by
males
. One can take the example of
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arduous
various
jobs like constructions which are being done better by
males
. So by the continuity of
this
trend many fundamental careers might be affected. To sum up, the better chance that a female has to find a job and their
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enthusiasm
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working outside
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resulted in the exchange of the roles parents used to play. I believe the negative consequences of it are greater than
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benefits;
however
, setting a balance and sharing the responsibilities in and outside of
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fairly between mother and father would be a positive development.
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