You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mr. John, I am writing

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letter on behalf of

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of musicians, with

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to the recent notice that we are no longer allowed to use the community hall. Our music band consists of five members and we are one of the best performing street bands in the

city

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group has been performing in the streets for the past two years and we donate the money that we earn to the charity hospital which is situated next to the community hall.

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neighborhood

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is one of the most visited

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in the

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and a plethora of people just come to

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place to watch our band perform.

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will lead to a good economic boost to the

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council and they can use

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money to improve the infrastructure in the

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. As a group, we feel that

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community hall is a very good place for us to practice and we are

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ready to change the timings of our sessions to the weekends or switch the practice sessions to mornings on Tuesday and Friday. I hope you understand our concern and we are looking forward to hearing a positive response. Yours Faithfully, Brian

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Task Achievement

Ensure that your letter fully addresses all parts of the task. While you've described the group and suggested alternative days, expanding on why the group is good for the community could strengthen your argument.

Coherence & Cohesion

Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout your letter, using paragraphs to separate different ideas. Consider adding a final paragraph summarizing your request or expressing hope for a positive outcome, to enhance cohesion.

Coherence & Cohesion

Use a range of cohesive devices to link your ideas more effectively. These can include conjunctions, pronouns, and transitional phrases. This will help your writing flow better and appear more organized.

Task Achievement

Revise the greeting and closing to ensure they are appropriately formal. While your letter generally maintains a suitable tone, slight adjustments to the politeness level in your closing could further improve its appropriateness.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

200 words

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