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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #income
There are several reasons why university improvement should not be free.
Firstly
, it is often thought that it should not be free because the educational institution needs an amount of money to bring all the facilities to its admission.
This
 can result in students not having access to the correct materials and facilities to support their discipline which
consequently
 can affect their educational development in the long term.
Secondly
, people
also
 think that it should not be free because as statistics say, some students will not put the same effort into their studies if they are free.
This
 case has been proven in Peru when enlistment has been provided with free university scholarships, the motivation levels were not as high as those who paid for theirs.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 reasons why going to the academy should be free for everyone. Generally, the development of every country depends mainly on its educated people. Mainly working in primary sectors of
first
 importance
such
 as Public health and schooling, sectors that can not be achieved without the knowledge gained through years of university.
Besides
, if educational institution expenses could be free, It will be beneficial for the poorest sector of the country because after finishing their studies, these people will be competent in the work sector and eventually support their families economically. We don’t start our sentences with these words in academic writing:
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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