It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and tradition are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

The development of
technology
could make some
cultures
disappear. Some
people
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belive
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believe
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that
technology
and
tradition
can not coexist with
tradition
. In my opinion, I partly agree with modernization will cause
cultures
to change and my reason will be outlined. On the one hand, it is admitted that
technology
offers some clear benefits to maintaining
tradition
. The primary merit of
technology
is that provides knowledge of
cultures
to
people
. To explain, the smartphone can help
people
search the internet which has plenty of information about their culture. Another advantage of cutting-edge
technology
is that can bring our
tradition
to
the
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foreigner.
In particular
, our
cultures
will be more popular with tourists who do not know;
as a result
, local
people
will understand the importance of their
cultures
.
For example
, a product of
technology
called Facebook is a social media which can connect local
people
and tourists to have a cultural conversation,
thus
foreigners will know more about their
cultures
.
On the other hand
, there still exist some drawbacks of
technology
to traditional.
Firstly
, the development of automation could be disadvantageous because it causes some changes in our culture. To illustrate, on the “Tet holiday”
people
often make “Chung cake” which is a traditional cake on
this
day but when shopping online develops,
people
tend to buy the already-made Chung cake
instead
of making it with their family.
Secondly
, the development of
technology
could mean
people
will
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lazier and they do not want to meet their family face to face. To clarify,
people
can use the social media app to make
video
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call
in
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the day when the time for family
gathering
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.
For example
,
people
decide to use Facebook to make video
call
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when they can not come back home
in
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tet holiday. If they do not change their habits, they will lose their traditional
cultures
. In conclusion, while modernization appears to be beneficial for some reasons, including bringing information about
cultures
to
people
, I still believe that the negative impacts it may expert are considerable,
such
as
people
making
a
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video calls on social media
instead
of meeting in their home in traditional days.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • preservation
  • integration
  • global sharing
  • evolve
  • document
  • dissemination
  • renaissance
  • cultural heritage
  • undermine
  • erosion
  • customs
  • practices
  • complex
  • multifaceted
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