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Some people think computers and the Internet are more important in child’s education. Others believe that schools and teachers are essential for children to learn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays there is too much
crime
 in most states and there is a need to try and deal with
this
 problem. Certain individuals believe that criminals must be given longer
sentences
 in
prison
 while others think there are other ways for
crime
 reduction. I,
however
, think that there are other alternatives
besides
 giving long
prison
sentences
 to offenders. The essay below will discuss both views in depth.
To begin
 with, breaking the law is sometimes involuntary.
People
 live with different stress and pressure which sometimes force them to do certain crimes.
This
 is why I support the idea that there are other options for reducing
crime
.
For instance
, a study conducted in Ethiopia showed that 34% of offenders especially teenager thieves were coming from child-headed families. Thieving became their lifestyle as they tried to fend for their siblings with no adult to help.
Instead
 of taking
such
people
 to
prison
, the government should provide food and counselling services for them.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think giving longer
prison
sentences
 is the best way to deal with lawbreakers. They mention that
prison
 is a rehabilitation centre for criminals. I think
this
 point is invalid because the
jail
 does not change some
people
's bad habits,
instead
 they come out with new strategies for committing offences.
For example
, a study done in South Africa in 2014 showed that 54% of convicts when freed out of
jail
 resorted to
crime
 on purpose because
jail
 became their
second
 home.
This
 is proof enough that locking them in
jail
 is not enough, more needs to be done. In conclusion, I think there are other ways of reducing
crime
 other than long
jail
sentences
 because committing a
crime
 is at times caused by difficult situations which need government intervention.
However
, some think lawbreakers should rot in
jail
 as it changes their perspectives. These and more issues have been discussed at length in the essay above.
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