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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good trend, but some people oppose it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

In recent years, the transportation of fruits and vegetables by air has become more common, especially to regions where
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 products can not grow or are not available in certain seasons.
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 some
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 believe
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 is a positive development, others think it has negative consequences.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument , and in my opinion, it should not be used for
food
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 or products. All transport should be used for going somewhere , like travelling to another country. On the one hand, transporting
food
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 by air allows
people
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 to eat many different kinds of fruits and vegetables all year round.
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, tropical fruits like mangoes or pineapples can be sent to cold countries even in winter.
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 not only makes
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's diets healthier but
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 helps farmers in other countries earn more money.
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, in some places like deserts or very cold areas, bringing fresh
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 by aeroplane might be the only way to give
people
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 what they need.
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, sending meals by air has some problems.
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it costs more than sending it by ship or truck, which means the prices in shops are higher.
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aeroplanes produce a lot of carbon dioxide, which harms the environment and causes climate change. Some individuals say it is not responsible to use planes just to get
meal
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that is
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 out of season, especially when local or seasonal products are available.
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 could damage the planet in the future. In conclusion, sending
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 by aeroplane has benefits, like better availability and trade, but it
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 has problems,
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 as higher costs and environmental damage. The best way is to use it only when it is truly needed.

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Make sure to explain your main point in a clearer way. Take more time to connect your ideas and arguments to make your essay stronger.
coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument well and included relevant examples, which is a positive aspect of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is organized with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transportation
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Hardly grow
  • Out of season
  • Advantages
  • Access
  • Variety
  • Demand
  • Reliance
  • Local production
  • Disadvantages
  • Carbon emissions
  • Climate change
  • Expensive
  • Traditional farming practices
  • Opinion
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