We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, most
people
live in urban areas
and this
brings a lot of benefits as compared to living in rural setups. However
, certain individuals believe living in big cities is bad for people
's health
. I disagree with this
opinion to a greater extent. The essay below will discuss this
view at length.
First
and foremost, living in the urban areas
brings more advantages, especially considering the issue of education and health
as more schools and big hospitals are located in the city. For example
, 70% of the people
living in the rural areas
when they get ill are transferred to better hospitals in town. Therefore
, I oppose the idea that big cities cause health
hazards because it is where most individuals get better treatment for their ailments thereby improving their health
.
Furthermore
, staying in urban areas
is good for everyone's well-being. There are shops and people
are given the choice of buying a variety of fruits and vegetables which are sometimes imported from other countries. The ones living in rural areas
have limited choice as they sometimes eat one relish repeatedly because of few and expensive grocery shops without fresh vegetables. For example
, a study conducted in Zimbabwe in 2008 found that 89% of people
in the countryside eat one food for more than three weeks. This
causes malnutrition especially in children less than ten years of age.
In conclusion, I disagree that living in big cities is bad for the health
of individuals because they have many hospitals and shopping malls close by which helps them to be attended to early by the doctors and buy fresh healthy food in no time. However
, others think it is unhealthy to stay in huge towns. This
and other issues have been discussed in the essay above.Submitted by 1155131483 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite