Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays
people
spend plenty of
money
to have a wonderful wedding. Since these ceremonies are so special among
people
, and they do want a wedding without any problems and
also
incredible.
This
popularity of big weddings brings negative impacts
among
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couples
which I discuss in
this
essay. As
couples
want a wedding to be held without trouble, which
also
gives guests many services they go for pricy weddings. As long as
couples
expected to have a memorable wedding, they should pay for an expensive event planner who manages their ceremony with better services
such
as various food, suitable songs, and a lovely atmosphere.
Moreover
, an outstanding ceremony can receive many compliments from relatives and friends. They might talk about that, in every
places
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, and review the precise moments they had,
consequently
,
new
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married
couples
and their parents,
in particular
, will be satisfied.
Although
a luxurious wedding that costs considerably would be amusing, they turn to competition among families and friends. Sometimes
people
spend even more than their income by borrowing
money
from others to have an unforgettable wedding, and could not turn the
money
back at a suitable time.
Nevertheless
, they can have a beautiful wedding corresponded to their wealth.
In addition
, attending and seeing costly wedding has been raised everyone's expectation which
encourage
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them substantially to have big parties; they forget that saving
money
to have
better
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future for their life is more important than just a day. In conclusion, to have a perfect and memorable wedding is so important for many
people
which
result
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in competition among family or friends, or spend more amount of
money
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lavish
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • matrimony
  • social status
  • opulence
  • milestone
  • financial leverage
  • debt
  • peer pressure
  • consumerism
  • showcase event
  • ceremonial splendor
  • bridal extravaganza
  • market forces
  • commercialization
  • budgeting
  • social comparison
  • destinal wedding
  • event planning
  • wedding vendors
  • loan
  • prestige
  • economic impact
  • mandatory spending
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