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Nature has a more significant impact on human adult intelligence than nurture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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One time it was popular to argue that nature has a more significant impact on the adult
intelligence
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nurture
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This
 essay completely agrees with
this
 statement. I am ensured that nature sets an interval where
person’s
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intelligence
 may vary and nurture differentiation doesn’t even show significant deviation in
intelligence
.
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, nature decides a limit
where
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 human
intelligence
 may differ. Obviously, human memory, thinking speed and
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 of processes in
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has
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 never
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an
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infinity,
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 they are not relatively high than we could compare even now.
For instance
, modern computers
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exceed
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 human brain performance
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 many hundred or even s thousand times.
Secondly
, the different upbringing doesn’t result in a special way about adult human
intelligence
. Living in dissimilar social conditions
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 average can’t guarantee anything about intellectual performance, but only cognitive diseases. It was explored by
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of
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 California scientists that living in different conditions makes a very low deviation in
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 IQ tests. Concluding, nature’s impact on human adult
intelligence
 is the most crucial and impactful. The main reasons for it are that
human’s
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intelligence
 has a variation limit and different
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 conditions don’t have a final influence
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at
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person
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the person
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