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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the future, technology in transportation will become
further
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 developed.
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, people will create
the
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 new
function
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to
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 the vehicle which will be
driverless
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. For
driverless
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, these
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function
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functions
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 will not
requiring
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require
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driver
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a driver
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 in the
car
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, just the passengers only. According to
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, I think that the advantage of
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 vehicles outweigh the disadvantage
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I will show the reasons why in the paragraph below.
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 of all, the
driverless
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function
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are
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 more
convenience
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.
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As
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 today issue, there are many people that lack
of
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driving knowledge so they have to hire
the
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 driver for them which is quite expensive.
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, having the
driverless
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function
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 can solve
these problem
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this problem
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.
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,
its
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it's
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 good for
peoples
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people
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 that have to travel
for
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apply
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the
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a
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long distance
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long-distance
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 which driving can make you feel
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tired
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tried
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tired
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.
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, if you use the
driverless
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function
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, you can rest all the way to your place while the
car
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are
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 automatic driving.
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, the
driverless
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are
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is
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 secure. The
car
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function
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 will avoid the possibility
to
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of
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 getting in
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car
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a car
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 catch situation.
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, its no need to worry about
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the
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them
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 getting lost
from
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on
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way
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the way
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 to the destination. The
driverless
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also
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 have their own GPS which can bring you to the destination safely.
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, the
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businessman
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business man
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businessman
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want
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 to go to Pattaya for his vacation so he only set the way to the hotel.
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, he can enjoy his trip without any
accident
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accidents
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. In summary, I think that the
driverless
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 vehicle can bring
the
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advantage over
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. In
term
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terms
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 of more convenience and safety
which
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it
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 can lead us to have a better life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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