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Some people think that it is the best to live in a vertical city while others think a horizontal city is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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These maps represent the status of the
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 of Islip, a small town, and its future plans for development. Overall, there will be a considerable expansion in shopping malls and houses. Notably, the transport infrastructures will be developed in near future.
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 with, now, Islip town
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 has two parts of shopping sectors on two sides of the main roadway.
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 people house in the
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 and south of the urban area. There is a theme park to the South-east of the town and a local road from the northeast to the south of the city in which a school is situated at the end of that. In the future Plan, there is a wide range of various renovations, imagined.
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 of all, one of the shops will be reconstructed with a bus station, a place for parking, some new dwelling units and a smaller shopping
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.
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, the main boulevard is going to be replaced with a walking path in
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 plan.
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 in
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 planned development, the park would be constrained to a smaller area where some new houses will be set up in the excess place.
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, a circular dual carriageway would be constructed around the
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 which will become the trunk road of the city and connected the west of the township to the east.
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