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Global warming is decreasing. What is your opinion??

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It is always a debatable topic whether global warming is increasing or decreasing. I vehemently espouse that global warming is indeed showing an upward slope because floods, glacier melting,
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 depletion and a considerable
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 in the
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 of greenhouse gases are the indicators of it.
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 with, since the climate has changed a lot
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 the past few years, the flood cases have seen a multifold
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 in almost every nation. To clarify, due to
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increase
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 in global temperature, adverse effects on air pressure systems have been recorded which provide conditions for high-intensity floods and storms.
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, the rise in global warming has increased the glacier's melting process and
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 is the reason behind frequent T-sunamis around the world. A survey conducted by The Guardian Newspaper in March
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 2015 clearly revealed that the average temperature of
earth
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the earth
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 had increased 6.4-degree celsius from 5.8-degree celsius in the
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 ten years.
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, the increasing trend of global warming can be easily seen
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 depletion. Because the southern part of the Earth has been facing a serious issue of
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 layer and
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 issue is allowing harmful UV rays to enter the atmosphere.
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, people in Australia and
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New Zealand
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 are facing
high temperature
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high-temperature
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 issues.
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, greenhouse gases are becoming catalysts for
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 process. As
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the ozone
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 layer is thin and nowhere capable to filter
UV-rays
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UV rays
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, greenhouse gases like
carbon
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carbon-di-oxide
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di-oxide
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dioxide
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 and carbon monoxide are trapping these rays in the atmosphere. Resultantly, the global warming process has geared up and the same is causing many health issues.
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, skin burn, skin tanning and skin cancer. To conclude, it is unequivocal that global warming is increasing rather than decreasing and the evidence in
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 an
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 in the cases of natural calamities and the changes in the composition of the Earth's atmosphere.
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