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People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

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The group of individuals knows about the difference between children and adults, but one of the questions is
that
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; what kind of events and experiences make children become mature?
However
, from my everyday experience and observation, I can stand three major events that make a
person
 mature. The
first
 pillar of
this
 event that makes a
person
 mature is getting a job. If a
person
 earns
money
 by themselves, they will not spend
money
 on redundant things, because they know the value of
money
 and
also
 know that many difficulties have
to
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challenge for earn
money
. In
this
 way, a job provides a major contribution to making a mature
person
.
Education
 is the
second
 event in regard to maturity. According to my opinion,
education
 not only teaches about how to crack the exam but
also
 teaches life lessons.
For example
,
education
 teaches to
person
, how to respect older people, and how to stay people
with
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happily. These things are beneficial to being an honoured
person
.
Finally
, I believe that responsibilities are considered
as
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a great sign of a mature
person
.
Although
 he has in a difficult situation, he is not run away from his responsibilities.
In addition
, he does not pass comments on other people based on their character. To conclude, it can be commented that,
however
, there are many things that are considered as being a mature
person
, but above mentioned three events
such
 as Job,
Education
, and Responsibilities, which enough to prove a mature
person
 and his maturity.
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