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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about real events, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

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Books
 are referred to as a
people
's best friends, but it is argued that the group of individuals ought to read merely those
books
 which are based on true events, famous personalities as well as discovered true things. If questioned, I agree with
this
 viewpoint. I would discuss my opinion in the following paragraphs. There are numerous reasons behind that to read based on true events
books
, but the foremost reason is that these types of events can be influenced
people
's minds.
For example
, a well-known scientist “Andrew Mathews” was inspired by “The untold science” book.
This
 publication is based on scientific experiments. He did not interest to become a scientist when he was younger.
However
, after reading that publication he was truly attracted to science
,
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 and started experimenting at an early age.
Consequently
, he became a great scientist in the UK.
Moreover
, real
books
also
 help to change
people
's behaviour.
For instance
, a welfare person “Suet” was inspired by the
novel
 “The Mother Teresa”. Before his unpaid service to the community, he was a burglar. He was punished in jail. After the completion of his punishment, he had read that
novel
.
This
novel
 had deeply effect on his mind. Because of that, he had left a robbery and joined N. G. O. And helped
people
. So based on
this
 factual story can be said that a
novel
 is the best way to change
people
's behaviour. To conclude, it can be commented that, how
books
 help to change
people
's mindset as well as influence their minds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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