Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Kids have the ability to learn more effectively by watching television and
therefore
should be more encouraged to watch
tv
more often at their own home or at school. In
this
essay,I will provide my personal opinion. Nowadays,
children
have a
lot
more
access
to new information or to learn a new thing by watching a
show
or a commercial on
tv
. In saying
this
, kids can by accident see something they should not have seen by watching a
show
not age-appropriate.
For example
, between the years 2002 –
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and 2005
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2005
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,2005
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a
tv
show
called Simpsons
were
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was
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very popular and a
lot
of young viewers were watching.
This
programme showed everything from murder to silly jokes that were inappropriate to younger kids. A
lot
of parents back
then
felt that Simpsons should be banned from being shown since they felt they did not have the possibility to remove it from their own
tv
.
In addition
, a
lot
of TVs these days
to
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have
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a child
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child
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children
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lock
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locked
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on their system,
this
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which
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will make it easier for parents in current times to lock programmes that they do not want their
children
to have
access
to.
This
will
also
give a mom or a dad an opportunity to let their
child
watch something more appropriate for their age and have the chance to gain new knowledge.
For instance
, in most of the world single parents who do not have
access
to help from another person, lets their
child
sit and watch a
show
on Disney channels. They produce a
lot
of positive information and have the possibility to let the kid learn. To sum it up, young
children
do have more knowledge and can
easy
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access
any
show
they want on a
tv
.
Therefore
, it is important grown-ups use
child
locks on their personal TVs as well as ensuring their
child
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child's
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safety. I personally believe that
children
should be more controlled in what they are watching and that the people around them ensure they are only looking at age-appropriate programmes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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