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Band 4

some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 are living around many
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 and we make our
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 moment by moment
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 our life. Because
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 some
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 believe that nowadays we have too many
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. I totally agree with those
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. I'm going to provide some examples which support my view. One of the major reasons why I believe we have multiple
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 is related to our modern lifestyle.
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, nowadays, technology has been playing
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 role and it gives more
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 to
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, using
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technology
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 can make daily basic
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such
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 to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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order through their smartphone in order to buy
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something
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 they need.
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,
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 can select their road during
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rush time and they have
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possible
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 to select the meals
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 they want to have for lunch or dinner via technology. It seems that those are so basic and tiny
choice
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choices
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. But
people
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 have a number of
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 for making a big
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decision
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 as their marriage and studies. Another reason why they have many
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 in recent times is associated with human freedom. The freedom gives more opportunities to
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 making
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 can select their living place freely at least. In conclusion, all activities are based on
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's
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 even big
activites
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activities
 and small activities. So, if
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 can make
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 right choice and decision, they can be
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successful
successfully
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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