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Write a story about a person who inspires you. What does this person do? Why is it important? How does this person influence you and others?

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I introduce person is my 5th and 6th elementary
school age
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school-age
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class
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teacher
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. He was
famous
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 and popular
teacher
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 among some students.
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 is because his
classroom
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 is very distinctive. He forgives eating snacks with friends in school even though the school rule doesn’t
allow
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.
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, he calls
nickname
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the nickname
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of
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classroom
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students
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thus
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 I was called “
Nana chan
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” by him. I was ashamed at the
first
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, but the other students
also
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 called me that nickname gradually. I was
favorite
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 it while I didn’t
recognize
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. The
teacher
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’s most unique point is he sometimes didn’t have teaching when
class
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 time. He let
classroom
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student
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students
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 do the teaching for 1 term
class
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instead
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 of
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teacher
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a teacher
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. I remember I did about it related to business manner topics in front of classmates and that
teacher
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.
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, he tells us
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the moral
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moral
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morals
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 of society.
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, he let thinking about “what
is
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are
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 the
people
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?” “why
we
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 fall in love with other
people
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?” something like that. At
this
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 time, one
incidence
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 occurred which
was
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inspired me. One day
classroom
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, he told us that we share with each other
which
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the bad things happening
this
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 week in
class
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. Certainly, I pronounced them what I was shocked due to a little ignored by my friend at that time.
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 the
teacher
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 said to me without any sympathy for me, you are putting
around
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people
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 on the shelf. When I heard that word in front of 38 numbers of classmates, I was very surprised and embarrassed,
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subsequently
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 I was crying. I remember that situation vividly. Right after he told me it, I resented him for a while.
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, after that
happening
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, I become review
on
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 my personality more and more. In retrospect, it was true I was so selfish and I despised other
people
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. I could notice my bad point, so I could be more thinking about other
peoples’
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people’s
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mind
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minds
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 more than before. He changed my character to good distinction.
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, I’m grateful
the
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to the
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teacher
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 now.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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