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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however, believe that scholl is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The present generation of
kids
 is a pillar of the future of any nation.
Hence
 a fair amount of educational experts believe that
kids
 must learn basic moral topics at home as these
values
 can be helpful to society and I would like to express my opinions with some relevant examples of the given statement.
Firstly
,
kids
 will learn many things from their
parents
. To elucidate
further
, right from their childhood onwards
kids
 will spend a major amount of quality time with their
parents
 only. In fact, it is a father's primary responsibility to groom their
kids
 with the best moral
values
 in society.
Secondly
, a kid can have a soft touch with their mother, which would help to convey some good lessons before going the bed.
For instance
, what
parents
 teach some bedtime stories might be the game changer in
kids
' life.
For example
, as per recent Google survey findings, 99% of school students are learning some good concepts from their
parents
 and grandparents too.
However
 undoubtedly, there are some situations wherein both
parents
 are busy with their regular jobs and not getting enough time to teach some good
values
 and
then
 they must learn those concepts from their school.
On the other hand
, there is a difference in teaching methods between mothers and teachers. the entire world knows who is the best teacher in everybody's life. To sum up, No matter where and how
kids
 are learning ethics and
values
 but the end of the day how the kid is behaving in society is the final.
Last
 but not least it is the equal responsibility of everyone to teach good things to our
kids
.
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