Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The discussion of what kind of personality should be encouraged has triggered a controversion. Some people believe that a sense of

competition

is more useful, whereas others argue that

cooperation

is of

paramount

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importance

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children

. In my opinion,

competition

and

cooperation

are not mutually exclusive, and both

competition

and

co-operation

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cooperation

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should be encouraged in

children

. A sense of

competition

is of great importance to

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individual

success

and social progress,

thus

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personality should be encouraged when an individual is growing up. It is not uncommon that

competition

motivates people to

performance

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better, so it can drive

children

to be better in both academic performance, self-discipline, career

success

and other aspects. The sports

competition

is a good telling example. It is a sense of

competition

that motivates athletes to break records and pushes them to win their career

success

. A leader who is told to be competitive in childhood is more likely to provide better

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or products

,

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since he is not

willing

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being

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left behind

then

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apply himself to create new ideas.

However

,

cooperation

helps

children

to improve their communication and organization skills which play a significant role in work. In

the

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modern society, it is undeniable that under no circumstance can an individual accomplishes a whole task. Even cultivating vegetables, farmers

requires

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others’ assistance in selling or delivering the products. regarding

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most employees, it is unavoidable to communicate with their leader or colleagues. In my opinion,

competition

as well as

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, as well as cooperation,

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cooperation

should be encouraged in

children

, for both are useful skills in helping them be

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success

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.