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When someone achieves greatness thanks to an innovation or other breakthrough, it is usually agreed that the individual has a high level of intelligence. Do you think that inborn thinking skills play the main role in the successful life of people? What role does ‘nurtured’ intelligence play in achievements of a successful person?

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new
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 unbelievable peak or exploring a
novelty
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 society makes
from
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him a
high
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 intelligent person.
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 essay says that inborn thinking skills
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 play the main role in
life
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the life
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 of successful people and nurtured
intelligence
 is the key
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 it. Obviously, congenital thinking abilities are not even close to enough to live in
the
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modern society. In fact, these skills usually end up by the
primary
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 needed instincts and without
an
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enlargement of knowledge basis,
person
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a person
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 is completely unable to explore something new. If we compare two different people, it is evident that
one
 who has access to the present knowledge of the whole
humanity
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of humanity
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 will be much nearer to
make
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making
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breakthrough
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a breakthrough
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 than
one
 who explores all of
things
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the things
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 by himself.
Consequently
, nurtured
intelligence
 is the crucial
one
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for success. The big idea of nurtured
intelligence
 is to bequeath and inherit experience from
one
 generation to
next
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the next
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, thereby progress is much closer for
newer
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the newer
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 generation has a basis where their ancestors were grounded. It may be proved by
scientists
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scientists'
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 opinion that
burning
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the burning
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 of the Alexandrian library inhibited human progress for hundred years. Concluding,
inborn
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the inborn
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 ability to think doesn’t play the main role in the successful life of people,
conversely
 nurtured
intelligence
 is the
one
 that does. That’s why if you want to succeed in something, you have to effort in long-life learning.
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