Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is lucid that the economy is fundamental when we want to improve
quality
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the quality
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of life-style
life-style
in communities. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
Therefore
, some of the more disadvantaged populations do not have more alternatives different than survive everyday
with less than the Replace the word
every day
basic
. Fix the agreement mistake
basics
For example
, in the North region of Colombia, La Guajira people
see their relatives passing away everyday
because of the lack of food or drinkable water.
Despite Replace the word
every day
this
situation, those communities will never go out of poverty if welfare continues being the only support, and that is
what economic progress means for them, just money to buy food for an
specific period of time. Change the article
a
Thus
, this
resources will finish one day and the problem will remain the same because they do not have Correct determiner usage
these
education
to create new alternatives or Change the article
the education
Correct your spelling
manage
mange
their finances, Correct your spelling
manage
consequentely
, they would give the power to others and Correct your spelling
consequently
tehre
is when the corruption makes Correct your spelling
there
Add an article
a presence
presence
. Replace the word
present
On the other hand
,if governments focus on an hollistic
work that Correct your spelling
holistic
improve
all the need of Change the verb form
improves
people
such
as educational programs as well as physical- mental
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and mental
wellbeing
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well-being
people
will be prepare
to Change the verb form
be prepared
built
their new solutionsChange the verb
build
. .
To conclude, I am a strong defensor of Replace the punctuation
.
...
the
education to transform societies and it does not matter the money when Correct article usage
apply
people
does
not know how to use it. Correct subject-verb agreement
do
Hence
, though i
consider money is important Change the capitalization
I
develop
knowledge and it must be part of the countries' plan it should not be a sole category.Add the particle
to develop
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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