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Today the majority of children are raised by their grandparents due to the fact that their parents are busy working. To what extent do you think it affects the whole family?

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In the past, one of the
parents
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, usually the mother, stay at home for looking after their
children
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. Nowadays, career-oriented
parents
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 continue their jobs even if they have
children
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.
Grandparents
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 are the best or perhaps the only choice for
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parents
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,
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 there are some disadvantages.
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 emerging trend has affected almost every sphere of family life. Trustworthiness and parenting experience are two important factors which assure
parents
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 that their child is safe and properly taken care of.
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 allows
parents
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 to work with peace of mind. Apart from
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,
grandparents
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 tend to teach values which are more or less consistent with the values of their
parents
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.
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 not only narrows the generation gap but
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 saves
children
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 from being affected by the temporal trends. Like any debatable issue,
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 too has its either side. Many
children
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 cannot develop an intimate relationship band with their
parents
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.
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 comes to the fore when
grandparents
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 die. At
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 time,
children
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 tend to feel lonely.
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, being in their sixties or seventies,
grandparents
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 find it difficult to take care of their grandchildren. It has nothing to do with their love and affection; rather it is a health and age-specific issue.
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,
grandparents
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 have to spend their time with grandchildren but they want it to be a leisure pursuit and not a responsibility. In conclusion, the changing socio-economic era has forced
parents
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 to work more and more to satisfy their needs and desires. All
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 has left the
parents
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 with no or little choice but to leave
children
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 either with
grandparents
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 or in baby care centres.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Generational gap
  • Cultural heritage
  • Primary caregivers
  • Modern parenting techniques
  • Family bonds
  • Emotional development
  • Social development
  • Role reversal
  • Physical demands
  • Mental health
  • Direct involvement
  • Missed milestones
  • Guilt or stress
  • Wisdom and patience
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